a once-upon-a-time-friend of mine, told me once, that the reason my poetry was not getting published was that i did not know how to position it. an interesting thought and to back it up, he gave me words, ideas..inspiration.
this is what i came up with. and this poem is for him.
More than rhyme
my poetry is an aphrodisiac
prozac in a silken sac
a mood enhancer
for the giver and receiver
a pick me up not a placebo
a strong cup of java please two to go
a lifestyle drug a coffee table book
a beautiful woman worth a second look
all the things you wanted
but could never be
all the things you thought were
real but could never see
mine is the siren song
taking you to your doom
giving you wings to fly
to escape from this gloom
place your hand in mine oh reader
i am what you want
find in me your orgasm
or hit me with your taunts.
i followed it up with this..
Escort service
i am a prostitute to my muse
for him to use reuse refuse
to pour his juices in me as he sees fit
with my inferiority champing at the bit
no escort service for me
my muse my companion of eternity
do not abandon this lost cause
i will be yours. pause.
4 comments:
I accept, that unlike your previous posts, this was more, er, appealing! But the sense of seriousness, prevailing in your other poems doesn't exactly seem to hinder their appeal.
So, I think it would be great if you could inculcate a sense of rhyme into them instead of rhyming all along. Period.
now why would you remove a comment?? am intrigued. your comment was hi-fi and i think i know what u are trying to get that.
the thing is, i don't try to rhyme that i can now try to "inculcate a sense of rhyme" into my work.
i write. period.
and the poem writes me.
Actually, I had made a spelling mistake in my previous comment and hence removed it immediately. No offence meant.
And of course, the poem writes you. No questions regards that. But, for poetry novices like me, rhyming is what that gives a feel to it. So, I suggested rhyming for sake of greater appeal. Again, no offence meant there.
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